Day 254: Forgery

[tanaquiljall]

Another in my series in which "Denethor and Finduilas tell Faramir the stories of the constellations of Middle-earth".

Day 254

as part of the Heavens' Embroidered Cloths series.

Forgery

"Before Sun and Moon, and Tree of Silver and Tree of Gold, two great lamps lit the world. When the corn ripened under their light, the Queen of the Earth begged the Maker to forge her a sickle to reap it.

"The Kindler, passing the Maker as he worked, saw how sparks struck from the sickle gleamed against the soot-blackened walls of the forge – and how the dark made the light more beautiful.

"And so, when the Black Foe o'erthrew the lamps, the Kindler conceived the stars, setting these seven against the heaven's arch in memory of the Maker's Sickle."

Comments

[elena-tiriel.livejournal.com]

Oh, Liz, I think this is my favorite of this series!

Your language is so strikingly visual: soot-blackened walls and the heaven's arch.

And the whole is so poetic! Very beautifully done, Liz! {{{hugs}}}

- Barbara

[tanaquiljall]

Aww, thank you Barbara. {{{hugs}}}

[dkpalaska.livejournal.com]

The language is so well done - just in the tone of an oft-repeated fable. I love the way the Valar are named, and particularly this line: how the dark made the light more beautiful. That's a world of commentary in itself.

[dkpalaska.livejournal.com]

Oh! And I meant to say that I really enjoyed the double-meaning of the title: forging steal and the "forgery" of copying the spark's of the Maker. Or so I took it... *g*

[tanaquiljall]

LOL well, I mostly meant it as a reference to forging metal, and also Varda's forging = making the stars, but maybe my subconscious was going for the second meaning too. ;-) Sometimes things turn up in my writing that I never intentionally put in there!

[tanaquiljall]

Thanks, Denise. I'm glad I caught the right tone - it's a little bit different to a normal Tolkienish piece, so it's nice to know it worked.